Eisenberg Layout Study.

I'm not good at backgrounds and layout, so I decided to do some studies of this.

Emotional Statement:
- The cat is looking something that he likes from the window.

Observations:
- The six main elements on the picture are:
1.- Ground.
2.- Store
3.- Tree
4.- Fence.
5.- Cat
6.- Bird
- The cat is not in the middle, is more to the rigth and down.
- Big contrast between the cat and the store.
- The store is the biggest element in the picture.
- seems that the tree breaks the monotony of most straight objects, it also have the same inclination as the cat.
- the foliage of the tree points to the cat and this in turn points to look at the bird.
- there's big neg space between the tree and the cat and not much details in the elements.


this is the 11 drawing.
Is very difficult to make all the details on a small paper, so just leave it simple just to see de composition. I guess that this was drawn on paper larger than letter size.

Heartaches Pilot: Layout attempt.

LAST Update:


This is my last drawing after the corrections.

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-Line of action slightly bent
- slightly asimetrical and organic head.
-Big Nose
- Big floppy ears.
- Big Hands.
- Eyes slightly on diferent angles and one on top of each other.
- The eyes have soft corners
- The head have more weight in the bottom.
- The Tail of Spaz is big and heavy, the weight is on the bottom.

- face too streched.
- Needs bigger eyes.
- The fingers holding the tail should be better drawn. We should feel that they are grabbing the tail and it has weight.
- Bigger pointy hand.
- The hand that's holding the tail should have a more slithly bent curve.
- The raising ear should be slightly smaller

Man this is hard!

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I decided to do a more easy pose for study (I'm not prepared for Scribner I think, hehe)

Visual Statement:
- The dog is surprised to find Spaz with that particular smell.

Analysis:
Dog
- Clear Line of action
- Big head, little body.
- Big long ears
- Thin arms
- Big hands
- Big Nose.

The focus of this picture is the dog pointing Spaz butt.

Maybe I have to do a bigger pointing hand and put it bellow the arm that holds the tail.
What do you think John?

George and his Chainsaw

Verbal Analysis:
-His line of action is tilted slightly to the back.
-His porportions are two heads tall.
-He has a big head with big eyes and smile.
-His eyebrows are up
-He has a little hat.
-The right foot is bigger than his left. it's in perspective.
-He's holding a saw larger than its body, so his left arm should be slightly curved to look like holding a large, heavy object. The other arm is for control I think, so it has to look solid and firmly for controlling that saw.
-The head sticks out from his body.
*Watch the silhouette.
*Watch the negative space between george and the chainsaw.


I made his head tilted up, which is not.
The left eye needs to stick out.

2 Slabs and a Bastard *EDIT*

*EDIT* I tried to fix the mistakes I had on the previous drawings. The fixed versions are underneath each one of the storyboard sketches. Let me know what you think! I'd like to hear some feedback!

Hey, I'm back! And it's been forever.

Here's some Slab practices so I can try to maintain the guts of the characters from the storyboard sketch. Right now I feel like I got a long way to go for me to start staging characters within backgrounds, so I figured I'd practice doing some more of these until I get good enough with actual layout making.

*FIXED*

*OLD*

The Slab on top came out pretty good I think. I made his head and cheek area a bit slender. I could've moved the head a bit to the right more and also add more tilt. I do like how the perspective on his feet came out though.

*FIXED*

*OLD*

I tried pushing his pose a bit further in the top one. I could've added more perspective in the head by making it smaller while his body is more closer and bigger towards us. I noticed I strectched out the arm that connects to the big fist too much. Gotta fix that.

*FIXED*

*OLD*

This Donald Bastard was fun to do. I like that I added more perspective on his feet to make his stance seem more balanced. I could've made his arm on the right a bit bigger for it to seem more solid and have his hat stretched out a bit on top, but I had to cramp it a bit for it to fit on the page. I'll fix it though.

I'd like to hear what you guys think!

Staging

UPDATE!:

5th attempt.


This stuff is giving me HORRIBLE headaches!!!

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Analysis in words:
-Mickey is framed by the test tubes
-There is an interesting variety of sizes. Mickey is small and the other elements (tubes) are bigger than him.
-Lots of negative space around Mickey
-forms of elements are distinctive and varied
-mickey silhouette is clear
- test tubes have negative space between them

blocking out the things first. No details.

Check:
- Left side of the table should be more up.
- Mickey has to be more down.
- The big test tube from the left must be more to the left.
- The tube that is behind, in the left, should be thick and more hiden.
-The round container above the left side is bigger.
-the tube that passes over mickey is in a wrong angle.
-The skull in the left side is bigger, so the book.

Corrections:
More to come.

New try

Ive put the old drawing on the light table and tried to fix all the things John said:

"TRY TO MAKE IT MORE SOLID, HAVE MOrE Weight and smooth out the sharp corners

don't give him whites in his eyes

they are dot eyes like Barney Rubble"

My try!

I tried to get as close as the sketch as I could.

layout, CH

Here's my try. I first made this one. Love my improvised light table :D

SLAB BROKEN JAW

here's my attempt. Is it good? bad?

See Today's Post on Layout at my main blog

http://johnkstuff.blogspot.com/2010/01/lo-1-what-is-hardest-job-at-spumco.html

for those of you struggling to do layouts here

Roughs - Davi

my first tries of the exercise.

I can see some proportions that are not right... and I lost a lot of the negative space...

I will try to correct this.

Chris and Anne... your studies look good. It helped me a lot to look at yours first.

abraço,

davi

Pedro's Slab and Ernie Exercise

Hey, everyone! Happy New year! Hope your holidays were nice!

Here's my take on the Slab's First Fist layout exercise.


Hope these are okay. They aren't fully cleaned up though.

I wanted to see if I was going in the right direction before I kept going and wanted to hear everyone's thoughts.

I tried maintaining the guts on some of these from the storyboards. I think overall I did fine. There are some problems I noticed like some things are slightly toned down and I had some problems spacing the characters within the background like the ladder being to close to Ernie as well as too close to the edge of the paper.

I also tried maintaining a good flow between each pose so that they consecutively flip properly.


I remember reading a post that John did in his blog about how Irv Spence designed the eyes on some Tex Avery characters where their eyes don't follow the center line on the head without making them look flat. Here's the post I'm talking about.

I tried dong so with Slab and Ernie's eyes in most of these layouts so to attract the viewer to their expression in their eyes like the one Ernie has above, which I think was John's intention when he did the storyboard.

Doing this also helped the drawing retain the guts from the storyboard drawing.


With this last layout below I analyzed from the storyboard drawings that these last poses took up almost the whole spacing of the BG, so this is the layout I drew first while I visually planned out how the other poses from the other storyboard drawings would fit into that final spacing of the BG.


As I did the other layouts, little by little I started changing certain things in the BG like raising the top bed for Slab's big fist to fit in better or adjusting the steps on the ladder, so that all the poses read clearly alone as well as read clearly and make sense within the background.

I don't know if that was exactly the correct way to go about it, but it seemed to make sense to me.

Let me know what you think! If anything doesn't make sense let me know.

layout and toy study

Here are 2 layouts I made. I found the storyboard drawings on John's blog.

I did the toy study. I think it looks too soft and the construction is could be stronger. His head seems to small as well.

More Layouts

Hi everybody,

it is good to see your drawings.

I have made more studies.

I think I am getting more used to the model of the characters.. and also tried not to tone down too much the expressions and poses.

I will try to translate the emotional statement that I made for these drawings... actually I have a problem of vocabulary when I try to make the emotional statements in English... I can explain their expressions much better in Portuguese.

abraço,

davi

Layout Study - "Slab & Ernie"

Hello everybody,

here comes my studies of the last exercise.

it was harder than the one with Kaspar, specially because I haven't practiced a lot the model of these characters.

I just finished the drawings (I need to rest) so I can not see the mistakes yet.

I will take a look tomorrow and I will be able to post a self critique of the exercise.

I want to do more of this, it is very cool.

abraço

davi

Yes and No Kaspar Translations

This is NO. The drawing has been completely, arbitrarily changed. It looks like a phone doodle done straight ahead just for fun. Too wobbly.


This is almost a YES, except that it's cluttered with other doodles so is not a layout.
But the Kaspar about to bite the undies has retained the guts of my story sketch. It's a bit on the wobbly side but has more control than the first copy above.
The index fingers should be more pronounced as in my sketch. Read the story in context and you'll see that is in most of my drawings.
The underpants waistband is too wobbly. He hasn't torn it yet.
Always read the story so you know what's happening.
You need more silhouette. See the hand on left-compare to mine.






Expression is hard to read. His eyes are too small in copy. Always make sure eye expressions are clear and direct.

Again - just one drawing per page. You're doing a layout, not doodles. The point of the exercise is self-control which is the opposite of free doodling. Everyone here is good at doodling. But doodles can't make a cartoon.


The undies on the right stretch are too wobbly. They are being stretched, remember, so they would be tight. They should be longer and silhouetted against the right side of his face-as in my SB sketch.

Very good feeling of flesh overall.

Chloe Kaspar Kalamities

Many doodles and drawings have gone down, some better than others.







I like the top one (reproduced above) better.. it felt more dynamic, then again, maybe the other one has a more focused expression. Then again again, maybe I'm committing the cardinal sin of changing them arbitrarily.





I studied these Tom Oreb rabbits alongside Kaspar because they seemed to have a good balance of angles, relatively straighter lines, and curves, whilst still feeling organic. I find keeping my hand in studying something good helps me be less spazzy when I draw 'my own' things. I naturally tend toward abundant curves and waves, so I was just making an effort to be more balanced.





Hand probably not far apart enough, stretch not tense enough:





The arm probably could have been more solid and manly, and it's gone off the edge of the page too. (My scanner's not quite big enough for this animation paper)





I preferred the way the nose nestled in the central one of these: (By the way I work from right to left, I'm left handed, so often the worst and more primitive ones will be on the far right)





And I did find the arms on this one tricky to interpret





These were a bit poor, the middle one looks like a monkey, too symmetrical and boring. Also, the tug has become a bit slack:















Liberties taken, and failiure in the middle. Left one less even out, prob a step too wrong though:





And with bunnies:





I seem to be spreading him out and making him wider than he is tall. I guess this is me tending to slightly caricature his girth in an effort to avoid toning him down.





More shite, messy and doodly:





I did more perhaps too pointless to post.