I notice that people are having trouble deciding what is a mistake in the rough, and what is worth preserving.Extra floating lines are mistakes. When I sketch out a rough, there are sometimes extra lines that I just put down to get the drawing started, but then as I add more form, I realise I need to make the character bigger or wider, so then draw another line around the border of the character. That's the one that's right.
Any lines that are floating around in the middle of the character that don't describe anything are mistakes. Don't copy those. Your goal:
To preserve the life and design of the rough.
To fix the mistakes. (to see what is obviously a mistake, and what is on purpose)
To make the drawing solid, but to preserve interesting angles and subtleties of design.
Your NOT goal:
To completely change the drawing. ( I see a couple people doing this and I can't figure out why.)
I have drawn the same poses again to try to fix the mistakes.
I hope it had improved. I will draw more Kaspars tomorrow.
thanks for the advices Professor.
More Kaspar studies.
I don't feel that I am getting it right.. it seems to me that is better than the first ones that I made.. but still is not as funny as the original layouts..
I analyzed the emotinal statement and read the story a couple of times in the "JK STUFF" blog to see if I get what is going on in the drawing.
my self critiques are:
first one - there is a weird angle in the chest (I just saw it now) that goes in the oposite direction of the original drawing, the eyes are too separeted, and the hands are too high, the underware needs to be more organic.
second one - I think he has too many circle shapes in my drawing, maybe it would look better it he had more straight lines, specially from the chin to the belly. The hands are very diferent from the original, I don't know if is out of his model.
This is how I block out poses. Then I stare at them and se what looks toned own. I see that the expressions have lost a bit -especially in the eyes, so I am gonna go back and push them farther.
But I also was flipping the 2 drawings to make sure they moved right, which further complicates the process of layout while trying to maintain the life of the storyboard.
What I've done here is basically the same thing I did to the last Pixie and Dixie drawing:
-Make my copy better than the original
-and slightly change certain specific features on the characters so that their actions, along with their emotions, can stand out more.
This one was kinda tricky for me though, because I hardly couldn't find anything that I wanted to change from the original. To me the original is perfect the way it is.
But I figured I'd try doing some changes to it, so It seemed like a good challenge.
There was one thing that stood out for me as far as wanting to slightly change something from the original, and that was Tom's head. Not the head alone, but the placement of the head.
In the original he looks content, relaxed. Sitting next to the fire, catching its warmth, while knowing that there's peace between him and his two micey brethren.
So in order for me to make that emotion stand out more I had to change some of Tom's physical features.
1. I wanted his head slightly moved up at a northwest angle so it can seem less cramped next to the fireplace.
2. Elongate his neck more so that his shoulders seem more relaxed.
These changes, I thought, would add more to Tom's relaxed state.
So here's how I did the entire thing.
First, I put the overall shape where all the characters would fit in and added the fireplace.
I fixed my proportions and perspective (shown below), and added the construction to all the the characters. I also kept in mind of the small changes I wanted to make.
I added more to the fireplace for more solidity and added the overall shape of the logs. The pipe and pillow were also added.
I tighten the drawing more (below) and add more of the secondary features to the characters and objects.
I add perspective lines to where the bricks will be placed.
I continue adding more details to the characters (below), finishing up with Tom.
I put in the overall shape of the fire inside the fireplace and add the overall shapes of the fire and smoke coming out of the two ends of the pipe.
I fixed my proportions, add the final details, and here's the final copy shown below
Some parts look fairly accurate, but I think I made a lot of errors here.
Proportions are slightly wrong in some areas, especially Tom's head. The shape seems a bit more obscured than the original. Almost stretched I think.
I don't think I added more to Tom's relaxed state too. I think I just made his neck longer while everything else still feels the same. Now It just seems like he's trying to catch more of the fire's warmth.
I think I should've just relaxed more his shoulders, making them slightly less rounded at top, with no long neck and head being in the same place like in the original.
The rest of the errors are kinda minuscule:
-I made Tom's eybrows a bit too bushy.
-Made Jerry's head too circular. It's actually slightly egg-shaped.
-Had to make Jerry's belly more round
-Made Tuffy's nose the same size as Jerry's.
-Smoothed out Tom's torso where the bump is, where part of his rib sticks out
-Move the line on the backside of the pipe a little to the left.
I don't know, I might be wrong about this. I'd like to hear what you think.
How do you take a scribble like this and make it look solid, while retaining the expression and style?
Well first, analyze it emotionally. Kaspar is proud in a satisfied sort of way. He has completed a dastardly mission of tearing socks and has gotten away with it. His expression is confident as he gingerly puts back a destroyed sock.
Then analyze physically how that expression and pose is visualized in the rough:
His body pose is somewhat squarish, with the body leaning slightly back to the right.
His arm is in a soft kind of almost S curve. His eyes are asymmetrical but have to fit into his facial structure. His smile is off to one side. It pulls his nose and upper muzzle with it. It pushes the cheek up with it.
His arm on the left (and shoulder) is raised - the other arm is lowered and at ease. That hand points to the drawer of misdeeds.
Are there mistakes that can be corrected? - the nose should be pulled along with the muzzle instead of being in its normal middle position.
All the wiggly hairs have to be ignored while drawing the construction.
OK, now you're ready to draw the structure of all this:
Extra floating lines are mistakes. When I sketch out a rough, there are sometimes extra lines that I just put down to get the drawing started, but then as I add more form, I realise I need to make the character bigger or wider, so then draw another line around the border of the character. That's the one that's right.
Your goal:
