It seems I shortened the neck and slightly altered the tilt of the head. In fact the cranium is too narrow and I've tilted the eyes backwards.
In this next one I squished his feet closer together. That's if you match up the head positions. Got angles slightly wrong.
Then I did these two little sour puss drawings, because I like the Sour Puss.
Eyes too big and head tilted too far back in first one.
Now to draw some trees and fences and stuff.
These are not easy poses, but the dog body feels good.
ReplyDeleteIt's not made of pears and spheres, it's a more stylish character, more organic. it's difficult to achieve that.
In the first pose, I think you missed a little the perspective of the torso.The head and body of the dog have different directions and angles in the original drawing. I think the head has to be more big too.
the rear foot is brilliant, but the leg should be more stuck-up to feel more the force that it does.
I hope this could help you!
Good Luck
Hi Paul
ReplyDeleteYou're right about the perspective, I was sort of beginning to spot that.
Thanks for taking the time to look at them with your good eyes.
I tell you what I find I'm really clumsy at, which is the little clumps and wrinkles of cartoon flesh, which are details, but important details to making the thing feel fleshly and real.
wow, you're pregnant? when are you due?
ReplyDeleteon the second cat, the fur spikes should be part of the silhouette, and they are not in your copy :p
Hi Kelly
ReplyDeleteI spotted that with the fur spikes, but just went with the flow like a slacker. He needed to shift his whole body round a bit really. You are quite right. It's a fair cop.
Due in March. I have a while to go yet. The baby is the size of a lemon or somesuch currently. But still making its presence known.
You know, I think the head is a bit small on cat 2.
ReplyDeleteI should do the drawings right in the first place then we wouldn't need to say all this.
I think it's that you have to conceive of the line of action in three dimensions sometimes. I was marginally too preoccupied with getting the lines all nice and slightly missed the big structure.
ReplyDeletegood structure overall
ReplyDeletegreat use of negative spaces, sillos, line of action etc.
sometimes, some shapes might be a bit too thin or small
ears, craniums
sink ankles into tops of feet
be carefeul with fur and hair, that it doesn't eat into the solid forms it's coming out of (like the cat's head)