Yes and No Kaspar Translations

This is NO. The drawing has been completely, arbitrarily changed. It looks like a phone doodle done straight ahead just for fun. Too wobbly.


This is almost a YES, except that it's cluttered with other doodles so is not a layout.
But the Kaspar about to bite the undies has retained the guts of my story sketch. It's a bit on the wobbly side but has more control than the first copy above.
The index fingers should be more pronounced as in my sketch. Read the story in context and you'll see that is in most of my drawings.
The underpants waistband is too wobbly. He hasn't torn it yet.
Always read the story so you know what's happening.
You need more silhouette. See the hand on left-compare to mine.






Expression is hard to read. His eyes are too small in copy. Always make sure eye expressions are clear and direct.

Again - just one drawing per page. You're doing a layout, not doodles. The point of the exercise is self-control which is the opposite of free doodling. Everyone here is good at doodling. But doodles can't make a cartoon.


The undies on the right stretch are too wobbly. They are being stretched, remember, so they would be tight. They should be longer and silhouetted against the right side of his face-as in my SB sketch.

Very good feeling of flesh overall.